[Mkguild] Nothing to compare with (1/1)

[Kamau]

This certainly expresses the feeling of a newly changed well and I like 
the underlying theme of him trying to find himself again.  Just a couple 
of things I came across while reading.

On 7/13/2010 7:45 PM, Prof wrote:
> Greetings, dear Keepers,
>
> The following couple of lines would be the obligatory „settling in“-part
> of Mark Dreamers story, kind of.
>
> I decided against a day to day description and let him sit somewhere to
> make a résumé of the last days.
>
> I hope you like it and I’m open for critic and advices (and for pointing
> out mistakes I surely let slip *cough*).
>
> Sincerely
>
> Prof
>

Typo
> I suddenly /knew/ I can play it. I think I didn’t even felt that giddy
> when I discovered the abilities of my altered body out there in the forest.
>

I think I didn’t even >>feel<< that giddy



Confused sentence
> Her pick-up lines aren’t the most original. They haven’t to, though.
> Encounters like the current one generally only circling around getting a
> mutual agreement about the price.
>
Do you mean "They don't have to."


The ending is a bit odd (which could also simply be my personal taste) 
and I'm not entirely sure about the getting jailed.  But still not a bad 
opening story or at least a story to get your feet on the ground in the 
MK universe.

Kamau


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