[Mkguild] "Expansion of Power" Revision 1

[C. Matthias]

>This is the first revision of the story I posted to the list 
>earlier.  I took care of a good number of typos, and tried my best 
>to get rid of a large number of repetitive uses of "hyacinth" early 
>on.  I'm sure there are still a few problems like that, as well as 
>perhaps just in the structure of my sentences, so if anyone has any 
>specific suggestions for changes, please tell me.
>
>Also, if you have read the first version, there is nothing really 
>changed as far as storyline is concerned, so you probably will be 
>fine without rereading it just for the sake of the edit.

To begin, I am honoured that you would follow my work so closely that 
you could write a story like this.  It's almost what I had in mind 
for the dark temptation that Jessica will face in upcoming works.

First, even with the corruption, Jessica isn't going to do this to 
people who aren't willing... at first.  That sort of thing has to be 
built up to.  Second, she isn't going to know that the power of 
Marzac is at work in her until... well, I don't want to spoil that.

Honestly, you've come pretty close to the mark, Lurking.  I'm very, 
very impressed.  And delighted too. :-)

May He bless you and keep you in His grace and love,

Charles Matthias




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