[Mkguild] Leaving Lom - 2nd draft

[Kamau]

An interesting first entry into the MK story universe.  The structure 
was somewhat different from most stories I've seen here but considering 
what you were trying to do I think it worked.  Just a bit jarring for 
the reader is all.

It will be interesting to see what happens as they come to the Keep and 
adapt to it.

Good luck with future stories.

Kamau


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